PIRATE, zasha kirale

[Zasha Kirale]

[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=style,width: 460px; padding: 10px; background-image:url('http://i536.photobucket.com/albums/ff327/theSasa/paidrequests/awpp.png'); border-top: 10px #3e7f9a solid; border-bottom: 10px #3e7f9a solid;] ZASHA KIRALE PIRATE this character is played by zasha PERSONAL INFORMATION NICKNAMES: Lady Spite BIRTHDATE: November 12 AGE: 24 GENDER: Female RACE: Human SEXUALITY: Straight MARITAL STATUS: Single ALIGNMENT: Neutral Evil POSITION: First Mate CREW OR ORGANIZATION: Hades Blade Pirates APPEARANCE INFORMATION FACE CLAIM: Fairy Tale/ Flare Corona HAIR: Long and very virbrant red, more often than not in twin braids. If she lets it down, it is very long and wavy. EYES: A vibrant crimson red iris and wide eyes, giving her an almost manic look though she is entirely sane. Sometimes. HEIGHT: 5'10 WEIGHT: 150 pounds BODY BUILD: Well, the first thing your going to notice about her is her large breasts. Out front and almost completely bared like the girl on the page of a centerfold, she leaves nothing to the imagination. Her hips are large and well round, giving her the perfect hourglass figure. However, don't even consider this beautiful figure as a symbol of weakness. There is a hidden strength in those lovely limbs that'll knock you on your butt faster than you can say "That sh*ts bananas!" Her skin is very pale, and tends to bruise easily, and she has a very lovely face with full lips and wide eyes. ATTIRE: More often than not, she is wearing a red dress, with a long slit to show off her cleavage and an even longer slit up her right thigh to show off her pretty legs. She wears matching flats, which for her are better to fight in (Who wears heels to kick butt?). She also wears matching red gloves which reach up to the tops of her upper arms. When not kicking butt, or just when she wants to relax, she wears very short shorts and a cut-off tank. The colors vary, but most of the time, the tank is white and the shorts very bright. With this outfit she always wears flip-flops. OTHERS: This young woman always looks like she is crazy, something that scares the crap out of most people and often for good reason. She has a black tattoo on her right breast which seems to be a symbol of a tribe long dead. PERSONALITY INFORMATION LIKES: Men (Um, duh!) Fighting (Given...) Having the upper hand in anything. Birds Collecting the teeth of people she has killed Dancing Drinking Being a pirate DISLIKES: Having something stuck in her teeth Being annoyed Having to do anything she doesn't want to (She gripes for hours) Other women Having to pretend to like someone Not being up before everyone else Terrible singers who insist on singing And most of all.. Her hair being cut or breaking a nail SKILLS: Able to persuade the opposite sex (unless said male is gay) into doing anything she pleases. Know particular points on the body that are weak to weapons and pressure and is unafraid of using these points against her foes. Due to her lean, yet voluptuous build, she is fairly quick, which is dangerous with the type of knowledge she has. Can cook if needed, but only really fancy deserts, so unless you have a sweet tooth, you'll probably not like her cooking. Not sure if this is a skill, but she can sleep through anything. Once she is asleep, she doesn't wake up till her internal clock goes off. PERSONALITY: At first, she can seem like a very uptight lady with a strange way of making herself out as above other people. She'll smile straight to your face and tell you your trash at the same time. All in all, she is a total jerk around other people, but she continues to immerse herself in everyone's life, maybe just so she can get a kick out of tearing everyone else apart to make herself look better. Another key point about her personality is that she is a very tactile, observant beings. Everything someone does goes down as a mental note in her mind, and she looks for key weaknesses when she first encounters someone. All she is looking for is another metaphorical handhold for her to grasps to use to bring herself above the other person. She isn't afraid to ask personal questions, or pester to get the knowledge she wants, just as long as she gets it. However, when drunk, she can be quite sociable, and in a very good way. She isn't lewd or rude, she is actually a real lady, and can be very calm and kind. If you want to get her to do anything for you, or get on her good side, make sure to approach her when she is very intoxicated. Lastly, there is one facet of her personality that hides until when she is fighting her opponents, and is either about to finish them or had finished them. It is the loathsome, crazy side of her that does it best to empower her normal personality by tearing everyone apart; sometimes literally. If it targets someone, its like it is its own person, waiting till the right moment to take over and 'take care of things'. This is also the part of her personality that forces her eyes to stare so maniacally back at people, and to smile oddly at times. COMBAT INFORMATION SPECIALTY: She specializes in using swords and daggers, often hiding the weapon before striking. She doesn't like to fight out in the open, because that just isn't elegant, and the less blood on the ground the happier she is. FIGHTING STYLE: Not showy at all, despite her rather showy appearance. She is very quick and very precise, preferring to finish things as quickly as possible. She loathes lots or noise or bloodshed, as she deems this wasteful and definitely un-ladylike. WEAPONS: Zasha has two weapons, each she keeps on her person at all times, and which she cherishes more than anything else she owns, even more than her complexion, which is saying something. Her first weapon is a katana, with a inscription on the blade that only she knows the meaning of, and which she calls Zero. The handle is a deep burgundy, and has a black tassel hanging from the end with a tiny rose. The other weapon is a curved dagger with a red blade and handle, which she uses on the people who particular tick her off, and to ceremonially cut out one of their teeth when she finishes a kill, but only if it has significance. She calls this dagger Malice. WEAPONS ABILITIES: Sever Zasha draws Zero, and dashes at a foe, slicing at the wrists, neck, knees, and ankles as she engages in combat. Normally, unless the other can dodge these blows, she has cut main muscles and veins, causing her foes to quickly bleed out as they fight back. This can only last one post and takes three posts to cool down. Burning Back Zasha normally preforms this one at night, so that it works even better on her unsuspecting foes. She approaches the victim from behind and draws Malice, and begins to stab many tiny little wounds into her victims back. Unbeknownst to the victim, these wounds are all linked to some of the main arteries and veins in the back. They bleed out rather quickly. This lasts only one post and takes two posts to cool down. BACKGROUND INFORMATION HISTORY: Her beginnings are rather unknown, as she was an orphan presented on the step of the local orphanage as a frail, just tattooed two year old. The lady who owned the orphanage was a twisted woman who thought of the most unusual punishments for the children when they either misbehaved or bothered her. A small part of Zasha's mind twisted angrily at this cruel torture, but she shoved it in the back of her head for countless years. But one day, when she was but twelve, something snapped and she killed the woman. After coming to and realizing what happened, she came to terms with this other side of herself and ran away. From there on she raised and taught herself to fight and protect herself, stealing what she pleased and hurting whoever made the other part of her angry. Then she met an older man who specialized in acupuncture and massage therapy. He took her in off the street, and as she stayed with him, he taught her how to do acupuncture and massage therapy. She slowly grew to cherish him and his company, and even the other side that was filled with loathing began to calm in his presence; then, she began to fall in love with him. Then, when he went out for groceries one afternoon, he was robbed. The men beat him severely, and when she went out looking for him, she was horrified by what she saw. She brought him back and tried to help him, but before the night ended he passed away. The other side of her rose up and she hunted down the two men and slaughtered them like pigs. After scrubbing her skin raw to clean off all their filthy blood and burying her dead lover, she swore to never allow another beings blood on her skin again. Then she left the town she had been residing in, and wandered the world alone again. She lived this solo life for a long time until she met up with one Vincent H. Cole and joined his crew, and after a while became his first mate. Maybe it was the fact that she took nothing from nobody or maybe the fact that she was so analytical, but either way she is proud to be the first mate of the ship and it shows. OOC INFORMATION cbox name: Zasha AGE: Twenty EXPERIENCE: Seven years OTHER CHARACTERS: None FACE CLAIM: [color=3e7f9a]▍[/color] [b][color=48596d]FAIRY TALE[/color],[/b] corona, flare [color=3e7f9a]–[/color] kirale, zasha by rimy ♥ of btn!

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Okay, there are a few small problems here that need to be addressed before I can accept you. So, here we go! *clears throat*

#1: Able to persuade the opposite sex (unless said male is gay) into doing anything she pleases.
Okay, this is not gonna be allowed. It needs to be rephrased or taken out, it doesn't matter which. I know Hancock did it to a number of guys, but even with her DF, there were individuals who were straight and managed to be able to resist the temptation, both pirate and even the other Warlords, done through a simple case of will power. I don't care if she's flirty or seductive, but the phrasing must at least be changed. Your profile should list what a character does, not the outcome or reactions of other characters, otherwise it's considered godmoding to force that reaction on another character.

#2. Know particular points on the body that are weak to weapons and pressure and is unafraid of using these points against her foes.
This is a subject that actually came up on another profile recently and the admins have decided that we're not going to allow any to use pressure points as a combat style. The whole idea for this in anime is from Dim Mak, which is mistakenly called the Death Hand, but does not kill a person in a matter of minutes, that's something that has been widely exaggerated and instead focuses on causing strikes that do internal damage (ex. rupturing internal organs, which can kill, but can take hours to a few days). The only case in which this is automatically fatal is a strike that stops the heart and this is obviously not allowed, due to how rp works.

In truth, he idea of pressure points makes it sound fancier than it really is, because most martial art focus on some form of manipulating the vital points and weak spots in the body, whether it's internal (organs, nerves, ect) or structural (bones, joints, ect). I don't mind if she's trained in martial arts or has some medical background, but the idea that it is that easy to completely disable an opponent in one or two strikes, is not only much more difficult that shown on tv, but is very easy for many people to abuse when it comes to fighting IC and tends to make things a little less interesting. So, if you could change this, I'd appreciate it, though since your character's specialty is knives and swordsmanship, I would suggest centering more around that.

#3. Sever.....
Again, this is one of those descriptions that automatically defines that outcome, rather than gives someone any option other than blocking, which is physically impossible given that the strikes are centered, unless someone is wearing full body armor. Even in the best case scenario for most characters, if they even miss one of those strikes, your automatic outcome is bleeding to death in a matter of minutes, hence why this is not going to be allowed. It is seriously way to overpowered and I'm not sure if you've ever swung a katana, but making four slashes is much harder than it sounds, even in the One Piece world. The only characters known to use multiple strikes like this were characters that could wield 3 or more swords at once, but with just one, it's somewhat far fetched and again doesn't have many other outcomes aside from block and death.

#4. Burning Back....
Again, I get the feeling that your trying to go for the assassin angle with all this, but this attack is something more befitting a video game rather than a written roleplay attack. To begin with, the attack automatically assumes that your going to be able to sneak up on other characters, even if they have Ken Haki or are simply aware of their surroundings. The second, is that unlike the first, this one doesn't even allow the option to block, it just automatically leaps to the obvious death conclusion, which is not going to be allowed.

My biggest suggestion with the attacks is maybe to take some inspiration from some of the other characters in the One Piece World. If you really want to go with the assassination angle, a better option might be using poison or something to coat the blades, causing pain, dizziness, hallucinations, and possible death, if untreated. (Again, you kind of have to leave options. The more options there are, the easier it is for a person to come up with more than just block or die. Otherwise, fighting becomes repetitive and stagnant, and not nearly as fun to watch.) Another sword option maybe something like Brook or Zoro's Ittō-ryū style slashes, if you still want to shoot for focusing on the sword.

Anyhow, change the things I mentioned above and when you finished, re-post in the notification thread so that we know your finished and one of the admins will check it again.

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